Tears of a Broken gaze,
Near hits best avoided;
The shot I sent in a haze,
A friendship forever divided.
No gift restores Broken trust,
Only destroys and consumes all;
Might as well deliver the thrust,
To finish the pain and bring the fall.
Wow. This is intense. It's one of your darker poems, and I actually like it. The last to lines are very intriguing and is a beautiful metaphor. I really don't have a lot of experience on broken trust and friendships (at least that I know of) but you really captured the mood (I'm guessing) of the happening. It's stunning how much emotion you put in this poem.
ReplyDeleteI haven't really experienced it, either, but there were some instances where I thought for a while I did. It is a darker poem, which I didn't actually expect, but it came out okay, so I decided I should post it. Marysa may appreciate the rarity of this poem's darkness lol
Delete*does a terrible Emperor Palpatine imitation* Yes. Yes! Feel the darkness rise within you. *cackles*
DeleteCoincidentally, I fit as Luke Skywalker, there; Luke temporarily went to the Dark Side while on the Second Death Star, and then changed in the middle of the fight with Vader to return to the Light Side. Kinda fits with my one time dark poem :D
DeleteAnd then your dad kills me? I wouldn't say it fits that well. XD
DeleteWait, does that mean I get to electrocute you? ):}
You're right, it doesn't fit that well :)
DeleteI do appreciate the reference. Nothing like a Star Wars reference in the morning. :)
DeleteI love this
ReplyDeleteIt's my favorite of yours.
Lol Thanks! I'm not surprised :P
DeleteIn all the tabs (like the discussion board and stuff) you can't access the comments. What happened? love layout, btw. it'll take ALOT of getting used to, but it's cool.
ReplyDeleteYeah, definitely some getting used to lol
DeleteBut as far as the page comments go, I'm not sure, I'll look into it. I may revert the theme back to the original if I can't fix it immediately
Unfortunately, I do not think the pages support commenting, so I have reverted back to the original theme, although with default coloring
DeleteIt's so bright, I don't like it lol
DeleteI practically despise it, but I'm still trying to figure out why the main theme won't work, so until then, we're stuck with this, because I'm too lazy to put effort into something that'll prob fall in about a week :P
DeleteTry to change just the color.
DeleteThere, alternate theme that's less dark lol
DeleteWell that's a color xD
Deleteooo! I like the picture you chose for the main page and colors. It looks more Nexus-y. Whenever I here "Nexus" I think of space for some weird reason.
DeleteI literally chose a default theme XD
Deleteit matches with the space-y picture you got goin' though
DeleteI get precisely 0% credit for this, I literally clicked the first button I found and Blogger did everything :P
Deleteaww, man. I can't see how many views you've gotten anymore. :P
DeleteBummer... Lol
Deletelol. you've got to at least pretend you did it intentionally. Confidence, remember?
DeleteMasking discredit in confidence does not make it right.
DeleteTrue. I was being sarcastic. Sorry, I didn't mean for it to be interpreted as me being serious. XD
DeleteI know, haha, I guess mine seemed a bit blunt and rude, I didn't mean for it to seem that way lol, I was just poking fun.
Deletelol. It's alright. I seems both of us forgot that sarcasm isn't transmitted well through non-verbal communication. XD (that's also why I love XD, ;), and ;), because they reduce the possibility of me coming off rude)
DeleteVery true lol, I'm fluent in it, in real life.
DeleteI'm practicing. I love sarcasm and straight-faced humor, but I usually bursting uncontrollable laughter before whoever I'm talking to does. XD
DeleteI'm great at sarcastic humor because I have a sarcastic personality lol
DeleteThat's a summary of a lot of my friends. The only time I get sarcastic is when I'm taking to my one friend or family member who doesn't get sarcasm. That never ends well. lol
DeleteOh, no xD
DeleteYeah...
DeleteI'm definitely gonna delete this string of comments because, as you guys know, I'm totally not sarcastic :D
DeleteI'm guessing that's sarcasm. XD
DeleteOh, no, I'm being completely serious XD
DeleteThis is sooooo cool! I love the new look! :D
ReplyDeleteIt's temporal. The new theme won't allow you to comment on pages, so I needed to revert here while redoing my plans
DeleteEither way, still nice :P
DeleteThis is beautiful, Mark.
ReplyDeleteLol Thanks. I wrote this on a better day, but ironically, I actually fit the mood of the poem best when it was published
DeleteI really like this poem. I can, unfortunately, relate to it with the context of broken friendships, especially with the lines, "No gift restores Broken trust/Only destroys and consumes all;" Anyway, another great piece, Mark. It is really beautiful with the meaning and interpretation.
ReplyDeleteThanks, glad you like it!
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