Father (Come Back!) (Poem by Scotty Fitzgerald)

"Father, father, do you hear me?" I called to you. As the ocean curled in its rigid paces, Laced with linen foam, "You must be there?" you cannot be gone, You shouldn't have gone so far, "Do you hear all I say?" The water rolled in the leaving wind, The water fell in blue falters, The water twined, glistening, as sunlight, Obscured night, I called to you from the surf of the shore, As the sand laid golden in the soft glowing midday, As the year you were birthed in the month of May, "Oh, father, father." I cried out to you, For as through hope you'd whisper as the coming breeze, In hope you would never leave, In truth, burned to ash you were, And made of dust you were born, But as the stars dimmed faraway, And became mute with Mars, You were a burning ember in the dark, "Father, father," hear me, I stand with the ocean water sinking me beneath the Earth, You fly away with velvet feathered wings, As you comb through slender light, O' then, O' then, as you slipped from my frail fingers, And memories broke as gilded glass, Though you had much more worth than bleeding silver, As I lost you, Father, The water of the earth, The lakes and seas, The vast oceans, The dew in the faint morning, Ran dry, dry as the desert grew, With shattered grounds, And hot suns, As then, as then, you went away, In the month of May, the month of May, And light went mute, and my throat grew tight, And desperation came in droplets of sweat, Fear was near, with a clenched fist, But to stand on your second home, "Father, father," Do you hear me? A glimpse of you right there with green eyes aglow, With the sun now shining and linen foam to hem to your wings, "Father, father," please come back, Come to me from a descent from the silver clouds mended in gold silk, Come to me as the roses bloom in Spring, But do not make me wait until it is too late, For my heart had broken in a thousand tremors, And everyday is passing away as the deaths of people, "Father, father," I cry to you, As tears of blue, Flow in dancing rivulets from my eyes, "Father, father, return to me," Come from the bright horizon and fall with light, Bring me from my knees, Bring me to from the ice of below, As I have turned cold, And have grown old, Bring me, bring, me from my feet, To stand on a rise, As the dawn is above, "Father, father," I yelled, "Come back to me."
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Comments

  1. AH! I scheduled this for 7 this morning, but I had forgotten to post my comment when it published. My bad.
    This is a very cool poem. I'm not sure if it's religious or not, but it actually fits perfectly with the cry of a persecuted Christian towards God. The cry of, "Father, father, do you hear me?" and "You must be there?" are actually very similar to what Christians really do cry out verbally, especially when they know God hasn't abandoned them, but still feel like He's absent.
    And, another cool thing, it is sort of similar to my "Turn Back, Turn Back I Say" poem. It's very vague, but the resemblance is there. You see in the end, "'Father, father,' I yelled,/'Come back to me.'" In my poem, "Turn Back, Turn Back I Say", the ending line is "Come Back, Come Back, I Say", which is what triggered that line of thought. And, strangely enough, the religious interpretation (which may or may not be what you had meant) of this poem and the religious interpretation on my poem match up pretty well, overall.
    Anyways, nice job, Fitzgerald! I hope you keep writing, because you are a great poet!

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    1. Hi, Mark. Thank you, for publishing my poem. And thank you, for your nice comment. I didn't mean it to be religious. :) I was going for a mourning piece. However, I have been thinking about writing a poem, where there narrator is calling to God, to not leave him.

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  2. This sounds very very familiar to me, I feel like I've read this before, like I really think I have! :)
    Anyways, this is absolutely beautiful. I love the Christian feel to this and how it could be perceived from both sides! The descriptions and the way/tone it was written in is absolutely wonderful, and the words... It's really perfect. Amazing job!! :)

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    1. And you also told me the name "Scotty Fitzgerald" seems familiar, too, right?
      ...interesting... :/

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    2. Thank you, Gabby. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. I wonder where you read this before. Hmmm. And my pen name is inspired my F. Scott Fitzgerald. Maybe, that's what sounds familiar.

      P.S.
      *HA- HA- HA, laughing mischievously.*
      You'll never know who I am. Okay, okay, maybe you guys have an idea. Gabby probably has a little more than idea. But, you'll never guess. :p

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    3. Hi, Scotty. I love your pen- name. F. Scott Fitzgerald is one of my favorite authors. As well, your poem is beautiful.

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    4. Thank you, Shaly. I love F. Scott Fitzgerald too. :)

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    5. I KNEW YOU WERE FAMILIAR! And yes, it sounds so familiar... I know I know you XD
      I think you have a blog, don't you?

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    6. The thing is I feel like I've read that pen name before...

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  3. I've read this
    I like the new look btw

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    1. Another person who has read this...? "Book 1: The Mystery of Scotty Fitzgerald!"
      Thanks, Marysa

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    2. Hi, Marysa. Where did you read this before?

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    3. Lol I think she actually meant the cat meme I posted, and happened to be on the wrong post. I showed her the cat meme before posting it

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  4. Wow. You amazingly illustrated the pure expanse the child is shouting into. I can feel the child's fear, hopelessness, and despair. The emotion expressed is amazing! One question, how did it end? Will there be a sequel?

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    1. Thank you, Kyra. What do you mean will 'there be a sequel.?' I never thought of writing an extra part to this poem. How will that one even start?

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    2. Not again. I revealed my identity by accident again. Oh, well.

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    3. Maybe you could do the Dad's perspective of him looking for the son. (I have this thing of writing the same events from different perspectives)

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    4. That's not a bad idea. I'll see. If I do write it, I call it, "From Above." Thank you. :)

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    5. No problem. I love my random ideas. XD cool name btw

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    6. ...wait, is Shaly P. and Scotty Fitzgerald the same person? Lol Cool! The writing uses a different writing style which, in hindsight, suddenly seems so similar to your common one, and yet, like I was getting at, different enough to misdirect attention

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    7. Idk, if so, she would have replied to her own comment? XD

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    8. Yeah, it's a great tactic I've used a few times. No one expects you to talk to yourself

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    9. Yeah, I blew it again. Scotty Fitzgerald is Shaly P. :P

      I wrote this poem the August that just passed, so my writing style shifted a little from then. If you see my poems from this April to now, you'd see a great deal of change and some similarities. Anyway, this was a test. I wanted to see if my style was that distinctive and if you guys would recognize it was me. Plus, I wasn't speaking to myself, I was just primarily agreeing with the majority of the opinion. And I thanked myself for my own compliment. There is nothing wrong with that. Its quite normal actually.

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    10. KNEW IT! That cover was very great, you would've gotten away with it perfectly XD

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    11. Yeah, I would've gotten away with it, until I spilled the beans again. *Face Palm.*

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    12. It's alright, you did really well for as long as you lasted :D I would never have guessed, it was so good. Of course, now your cover might be blown, if you tried again :P

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