Among seas and stars, and across the earth,
Strung by ropes, an essence of worth,
Lies a treasure, beyond any other,
Measured in the love of a mother,
That those around may feel its pulse,
Through thorned crowns, it arose.
Strung by ropes, an essence of worth,
Lies a treasure, beyond any other,
Measured in the love of a mother,
That those around may feel its pulse,
Through thorned crowns, it arose.
Nice
ReplyDeleteIkr? You did pretty well! :D
DeleteThis is gorgeous, that last line though, perfection. Idk who did each line, but the whole thing is amazing, and I like how you both bounced off one another with almost two different meanings combining for one. Great job! :)
ReplyDeleteI did the first line, she did the second, and we kept alternating; Marysa did the last one. I agree, though, it worked out really well
DeleteY'know, that makes a lot of sense! :D
DeleteYeah, Marysa and I writing together is like a depressed person and an optimistic person trying to fight for attention :P
DeleteIt was difficult lol.
DeleteHuh, cool! Except, if Marysa and I collaborated, we'd get a week in and both decide, "Eh, who cares about quantity, they'll wait a month." Then a month later. "Ugh, we're nowhere near close, sorry readers." Eventually we get into a fight because we are complete opposites XD
DeleteAccurate. And I'd be right because I'm always right.
Delete...yep...-sigh-
DeleteWow, this was seamlessly sewn together! If you haven't had said so, I would've assumed it was written by one person. I love how it ended with a drop of poison.
ReplyDeleteWhat is to poem referring to? (sorry, I'm terrible at understanding poems. I mean ALL poems) XD
Marysa did the end, I wanted it to end positively! Lol
DeleteThis poem is referring to love. Love is a "...treasure beyond and other...", but it's also filled with "...thorned crowns..." is basically what the poem says. Thank Marysa, again, for the ending lol
Sorry lol
DeleteLol No, it's fine, I'm just making sure credit is given as due :)
DeletePoor Mark XD. At first I thought it was Christ, because of the crowned with thorns then arose line, which is what Jesus did. Love makes sense, though.
DeleteNah, Marysa wrote it, so it's not religious :P
DeleteIt could be labeled as a Christmas poem, though
DeleteI knew it'd be taken as religious but I wrote it anyway. It's a metaphor :P
DeleteIt's a cool metaphor, though.
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