See how the stars light up your eyes,
Till the sun makes you shine bright,
And carry you to a magical world where
You are everything to me.
How is it after all this time I am
Everything you taught me to become?
Right now, after a decade, I still search,
Exhausting myself in order to find you.
Till the sun makes you shine bright,
And carry you to a magical world where
You are everything to me.
How is it after all this time I am
Everything you taught me to become?
Right now, after a decade, I still search,
Exhausting myself in order to find you.
I had to come back and reread it because I forgot what this poem was lol
ReplyDeleteIt's actually pretty decent, for a first acrostic poem -shrug-
Decent? DECENT?
DeleteYOUNG MAN YOU'VE MADE A WORK OF ART!
Yep, decent -shrug-
DeleteThis is so sweet! It makes me think of Chári and Theyan (my OC's) in my book! This is one of my favorite of your peoms! I love how you actually don't rhyme. It makes the poem seem natural and not forced. I love how this encaptures both wistful fantasy, memories, and sadness!
ReplyDeleteWell then now I guess rhyming is forced.
DeleteTheyan is your original character? Nah, you copied him off of me lol
DeleteNone of the poetry I post is really forced. Some of my better poems are written in times of great emotional turmoil, and then most of my poetry is literally a compilation of various thoughts that pop into my head
And PoetofSteel, that's not what she meant. Rhyming isn't always forced (though it always is with me). She was just referencing how, in comparison to my rhyming poetry, this doesn't feel forced
I don't think your poetry is forced! That's a bit rude to say though.
Delete-shrug- It's really not. At least, not when it comes to me
DeleteWhat most of my real life friends learn fast is that it's extremely difficult to insult me or upset me. Some of my friends and I trade insults regularly and we always laugh it off as jokes
Depends on the insults...
DeleteI made Theyan who he is! I get at least 45% of the credit
DeleteThe way of the author makes no sense. XD
None of your rhymes are forced. mine's always are, though. XD
True, I suppose, PoetofSteel, but considering how easygoing I am, those insults have to be pretty bad lol
DeleteYou get 25% credit, Kyra. And even 75% would ensure he's not your OC, since you technically copied off of me, still xD
It never does, yeah...
Actually, most of my rhymes ARE forced. Whether they appear forced is debatable, though (and I think they do appear forced)
No one's rhymes are forced but me! REEEEEE!
Delete45%. Come on, the original Theyan was broody and confident, hardened by the world, my Theyan is an awkward nerd with a want to save his family from the empire only who's only similarities to your's is the name and species. Oh, and they both have a face. XD
DeleteYou were influenced by my adorkable Theyan to create your own, even more adorkable Theyan who also wants to save his family from the Empire.
20%
DeleteYeah, so my Theyan isn't my OC, either, but your Theyan isn't your OC. No one has an OC Theyan, anymore
50%. XD
DeleteYou should know by know you can't Tobias Beckett someone who's Tobias Becketting you :/ Even Lando knew it was a lost cause lol. 15%
DeleteIf it's a lost cause: 100%
DeleteYou've traded your 25% away for your pride...a shame...
Delete10%
100000000%
DeleteNot only is that literally impossible, but it sacrifices some of your credit. 5%
Delete*sigh* You're impossible
Delete4%...
DeleteWho?
DeleteTheyan? He's in our Star Wars stories.
DeleteHe's a Iridonian (a similar species to Darth Maul, but with normal skin tones and subtler tatoos) who's part of the rebellion.
I was pretty sure he's Zabrak...and I'm pretty sure Zabraks can have brown/tan skin colors, too (And the tattoos? Those are added, so it could be based off the general society. A Zabrak could have no tattoos, for instance)
DeleteOh, cool!
DeleteOoo this is so pretty! I love the descriptions and the peaceful vibe it creates. Also relatable and I love the message! Good job :)
ReplyDeleteLol Thanks
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